The Incredible Hulk

[Dick Grayson]

Approved

[Hulk]

(I'm going to try out for The Incredible Hulk. First I want to post what he will look like. If I get the character I'll probably drop Captain Marvel and change my name to Hulk or Bruce Banner. You get the point)

Appearance: (Bruce Banner)

(The Incredible Hulk)


RP Example:

Tapping noises could be heard in the hallway. It was coming from someone's room. An old man was walking down the hallway heading some where. He had a Spidey icon on his shirt with a huge smile on his face. As he heard the loud tapping noises he said to himself, "Busy person I guess." He said to himself as he continued to walk towards the stairs. As he opened the door to the stairs a man was waiting for him. "Ready to go Mr. Lee?" The person asked.

"I'm always ready for one of these things." Stan answered as he followed the man down the stairs. "Is there any business people in this apartment?" He asked. "Not that I know of, why?" The man asked Stan. Stan looked back at the door from where the tapping noises was coming from but looked back at the man and said, "No reason. I just had a funny feeling."

Mean while the person in the apartment room was Bruce Banner. He was talking to Rick Jones, an old friend of his through email. As Bruce clicked send there was a knock on the door. Quickly, Bruce reacted to the sound and just stared at the door, waiting for someone to talk. "I have a pizza for Mr. Banner." A weird look appeared on Bruce's face as he got up and walked over to the door. He thought to himself, I didn't order any pizza. Bruce looked through the eye piece on his door to see General Ross standing by the wall with a group of soldiers in the hallway. Bruce began to freak, running towards the window and opening it. He runs back to his computor and pulls the plug, losing any information on it. Bruce runs back to the window just as a soldier kicks down the door. As Bruce steps out of his window and runs towards the escape ladder, soldiers flood the apartment and began to shoot the windows where Bruce had just passed. Without hesitating Bruce dives into the ladder, almost falling off the building. He begins to climb down but once he notices the soldiers following him out of the window he began to slide down. Sliding down was beginning to burn his hands where he let go and began to fall. He landed on a parked car, his back hurting a bit but there was no time. Bruce quickly rolled off the roof of the car and started to run towards the streets. His heart rate was going up by a lot.

"Not now...not now!" Bruce said, running out of the alley and into the closet store he was near too. He ran into a women's clothing store. Bruce ran towards the back of the store and into the women's changing room. He quickly opened a door to see a woman changing her pants. She screamed once she saw him. "Sorry, I didn't mean to!" Bruce shouted, quickly shutting the door and running to the room in the far corner. He opened the door to see no one and quickly ran in while shutting the door. He turned around, locked the door and quickly sat down on the sitting bench; holding his chest. Bruce tried to breathe slowly trying to make sure he didn't...."change" in the middle of New York. "Calm down....take it easy...." Bruce repeatedly told himself. After a little while he looked at his heart watch to see his heart rate dropping down. "Thank god...." Bruce said to himself, wipping the sweat off of his fore head. He layed back against the wall, staring up at the ceiling. Ross was probably not too far behind him. He thought to himself, What am I going to do now?

[Pepper]

OK, I have a pet peeve and it's called dialogue.

"I'm always ready for one of these things." Stan answered as he followed the man down the stairs. "Is there any business people in this apartment?" He asked. "Not that I know of, why?" The man asked Stan. Stan looked back at the door from where the tapping noises was coming from but looked back at the man and said, "No reason. I just had a funny feeling."

All of that jumbled together makes it hard to decipher who is talking. It's easier to read if it's like this:

"I'm always ready for one of these things." Stan answered as he followed the man down the stairs. "Is there any business people in this apartment?" He asked.

"Not that I know of, why?" The man asked Stan.

Stan looked back at the door from where the tapping noises was coming from but looked back at the man and said, "No reason. I just had a funny feeling."

Much easier to read and understand, in my opinion. However otherwise, your RP sample is good. And HURRAY for using a face claim who's a real person!! Eddie Norton is awesome!

Okay the long and short of this post is such: approved.

I"m not moving it because the bio part of this is missing and I'm not sure if you need to fill it out again or if it'll just be accepted. You can start RPing and we'll see what the administration says about the missing information in the bio.

[Hulk]

Alright, thanks. Yeah, I couldn't see the bio either but it was accepted so I thought I would only have to post an example. Sorry about not spacing it, I just don't want to end up making a long post but I guess it would be easier to read.

Anyway I agree with you that Edward Norton is cool. lol